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To Be Charmed {Chapter 1, Part 2 Up!}

Postby owls-in-october » Wed Feb 13, 2013 12:10 pm



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I've been meaning to start this story for a while; in fact, it's partially true, but the details are highly exaggerated. I ask for criticism galore, and welcome any questions or comments! I will add new parts as often as possible. Thanks for reading!


This story is written using a technique called first-person writing; but you should be able to figure that out, as long as you have ever paid attention in writing classes (by this I mean Language Arts or English, whatever you wish to call it). The story is one of coldness, subtle cruelty, and more than anything, what it is like to be charmed.

Enjoy.


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Re: To Be Charmed

Postby owls-in-october » Thu Feb 14, 2013 9:51 am

Prologue


My hazel eyes blinked, struggling to focus on the words echoing out of the mouth of a rather chunky man with very little hair, standing just a few yards away. I attempted to fix my mind on the teacher's lesson, but it was a dull lesson, after all. How was I supposed to pay attention? It didn't help that my seat partner kept up a whispered river of flirty comments, which somehow seemed louder than the teacher's words on "archaebacteria's ability to survive extremely harsh conditions." Ugh. I hate science.

The boy winked as he muttered, "Will you go out with me, Kayla?"

I shook my head, not meeting his eyes, trying once more to ignore these comments. My seat partner, Ethan, grinned a cheeky yet somehow, charming, grin. I blushed, but not for the reason some may think. It was hard to ignore the charismatic words of this guy. He didn't really mean it, when he asked me out, and if I'd said yes he would've laughed. And how did I know he didn't mean it?

Simple. Ethan was one of the most popular boys in the school. He was already dating about five different popular girls. I was a dork, a dork with hazel eyes and dark brown, almost black hair. I wore a silver chain with a little sterling leaf. I was shy, all too smart, and not exactly what you'd call "pretty." In an effort to keep from drawing attention to myself, I never wore makeup.

Yet still he flirted. And maybe there was a time when I would've unquestioningly accepted his charms, assuming he actually liked me, and then the blush would've been genuine. But this was not then; and so I had to ask: what were his motives?

I'm not exactly a trusting person, if I must be honest.

>End of Prologue<
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Re: To Be Charmed {Prologue Up!}

Postby owls-in-october » Thu Feb 14, 2013 11:19 pm

Critique is welcome! This is probably my only-ever realistic story, so I'd love to pick up some tips!
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Re: To Be Charmed {Prologue Up!}

Postby cookies. » Tue Feb 19, 2013 11:26 pm

мαєƒℓσωєя wrote:Critique is welcome! This is probably my only-ever realistic story, so I'd love to pick up some tips!


OMG. I love this story. Write more please!! :D :D Stalking forevah.
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Re: To Be Charmed {Prologue Up!}

Postby owls-in-october » Tue Feb 19, 2013 11:34 pm

Thanks! You're so kind, ShaShaJean. XD I'm gonna friend you so I remember to gift you when possible. ;)
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Re: To Be Charmed {Prologue Up!}

Postby cookies. » Wed Feb 20, 2013 12:08 am

мαєƒℓσωєя wrote:Thanks! You're so kind, ShaShaJean. XD I'm gonna friend you so I remember to gift you when possible. ;)


x3 Not needed. :) Whats your dreamie pet currently anyways? (Sorry for off-topicness.)
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Re: To Be Charmed {Prologue Up!}

Postby owls-in-october » Wed Feb 20, 2013 8:59 am

It was the one in my siggie, which I got for a gift. I wanted the full set, though, all of the Easter litter. I have all of them but two now! The last two are my least favorites, though, so I think I'll use your very generous and awesome gifties to trade for other dreamies of mine; mainly the old-lineart cats. :D I'm so grateful for your donations, though!
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Re: To Be Charmed {Prologue Up!}

Postby cookies. » Wed Feb 20, 2013 6:50 pm

мαєƒℓσωєя wrote:It was the one in my siggie, which I got for a gift. I wanted the full set, though, all of the Easter litter. I have all of them but two now! The last two are my least favorites, though, so I think I'll use your very generous and awesome gifties to trade for other dreamies of mine; mainly the old-lineart cats. :D I'm so grateful for your donations, though!


No problem. Hey, when is the next chapter coming out?
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Re: To Be Charmed {Prologue Up!}

Postby DoctorWhoCrazy » Wed Feb 20, 2013 8:22 pm

More, more, more! Ethan just has to be evil, in my opinion!
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Re: To Be Charmed {Prologue Up!}

Postby GoldleafOG » Thu Feb 21, 2013 7:21 am

Great beginning! I'm hooked and stalking! ;) Interested to see what shall happen....:3
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