Hi ~Fang~
Your opening post, in your summary,
Faith could run faster than the spear of light
*Eye Twitch*
Otherwise, it has potential. You have no idea how tempted I was to pick the 'My Eyeballs are burnt out' option on your poll just because it's the funniest. No joke. I almost did. But I knew if I did, I'd feel guilty, but it really does have potential to be really great.
(And just think! With all those bumps, you have tons of posting room!)
I do suggest you do something to show a change in who the focus of each chapter is - change the color of the chapter name or put their name at the top or something similar, because when it switched from Faith to Destiny, it took me a minute to catch it and then I felt dumb(Which isn't a good thing to do to your readers because for some people that's all they need to stop reading)
Overall, it has potential, needs a little help to be a little less confusing, and I need to see more before I can decide if it's truly awesome or not. But it's a good start, so don't give up.(A lot of my stories don't become popular until the middle of the story or even its completion because some people like to let a story have quite a bit to read before they'll try it. Sad but true. I hope to see more of this in the future.)