This is a critique for Azora! Who the critique is for: Azora's Avaydian application.
What you had to say about it: First, to point out a few typos/misspellings: "Inclosed" in paragraph 1 (or 2, since there is a one-line skip between them) should be spelled "enclosed". And there is a typo in paragraph 5 (or 6, depending on how you look at the line skips), "mintues" should be "minutes."
Other than that, very, very good. Beautiful, although a little lengthy on description for the first few paragraphs. It really makes the world around Triniun seem lovely and pristine. I don't have much critique other than that; really good job. Are there other forms for the same design?
And:
I would like some critique please! Username: Tris
Link to your form: Click. It might also help to read
this so you know who and what Zevriel and Sarah are.
Adoption Agency you are applying for: The Agency.
Deadline for your form: ...Whenever the next code drop is. I don't know. Probably a couple of days. XD
Would you prefer to get feedback here or by PM? You can post it here; I don't care. XD