~ ρ α ι η ~ A very personal piece..

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Did the song not make sense?

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I didn't understand parts, but most of it made sense.
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~ ρ α ι η ~ A very personal piece..

Postby wicked; » Tue Jan 15, 2013 12:44 pm

// Just a little song I wrote. Thought I'd share it with you, maybe tell the story behind it. It's not a love song. Well, it kind of is. In a way. Not really. I'll explain after you read it if you choose to. It has a lot of meaning to me. I've never written something so....Expressing like. And when I do tend to do that, it usually seems really confusing. If you're going to read it, I just ask you maybe listen to this while doing so: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=clo2HXA7pN8 . Of course you don't have to. I just listened to it while I was writing it, and thought maybe it would give you more of a feeling to it. Thank you. -- Iris <3


ρ α ι η

darkness, it fills you,
will all your regret,
and the memories will,
haunt you forever.
it consumes, you.
shadows, to watch you,
and tease you,
for all, you've done wrong.

you're living nightmare,
it never leaves you.
you can't awake,
from your fears.
it consumes, you.

heart, heart, watch where you go.
your adventures always seem to know,
how to make it hard.
for me to live through.
if you want to fall,
then don't fall hard, for me.
i'd like to see you try,
try to rely,
on the stars for help.
they're not your magic,
they just taunt you with their beauty.

i love, love, you not today though,
i don't want to leave but it's time to go,
and remember why i don't love.
i'm just the one on my knees,
crying all night through.

but when nobody but the dark hears you,
the memories come crashing back.
filling your head.
who you are,
why you are,
when you are,
ready to fall.
don't fall hard,
you'll only feel,
Pain.

dark, dark, dark, dark,
Oh, dark.
my tears are made by you.
make it stop,
i beg you for forgiveness,
what did i do to make you hate me,
so you laugh when you see,
my Pain.

heart, heart, watch where you go.
your adventures always seem to know,
how to make it hard.
for me to live through.
if you want to fall,
then don't fall hard, for me.
i'd like to see you try,
try to rely,
on the stars for help.
they're not your magic,
they just taunt you with their beauty.

i love, love, you not today though,
i don't want to leave but it's time to go,
and remember why i don't love.
i'm just the one on my knees,
crying all night through.

my heart is not made for you.

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Okay, so if you're down here, you just read that. Thank you, I really do appreciate it. So, I know it may seem like a 'love song' but it actually isn't really. It's about the darkness in life that remind you who you are, and all of your flaws. The things that remind us we aren't flawless, and why we fear to take risks, live our dreams, love, etc. It's the things you fear that you can't stand up to. Those things that remind us, we aren't always who we want to be. We aren't....The one's we look up to. It is called Pain for a reason. A definition for Pain would be, "mental or emotional suffering or torment." That's describes the way we feel in six words. Don't you ever feel pain? Like you're mentally or emotionally suffering? Tormented? It's all in the definition. Sometimes, we are so insecure, nervous, scared that it's pain. We don't want to feel these ways. That's what this song is about. Thank you for taking the time to read it. Maybe you could vote up in the poll for me just so I know if it makes sense or not. Thank you so much.
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Postby wicked; » Wed Jan 16, 2013 9:45 am

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Re: ~ ρ α ι η ~ A very personal piece..

Postby wicked; » Sat Jan 19, 2013 9:53 am

Thank you so much for the votes!
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Postby wicked; » Mon Jan 21, 2013 6:18 am

Bump. :)
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Postby wicked; » Sat Feb 02, 2013 8:27 am

Bump. :)

Also, I've been thinking of writing this is a different language, anyone else think it's a good idea?
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Postby daemon-infernalis; » Sat Feb 02, 2013 1:02 pm

This.

It was the most beautiful writing Ive seen.
Brought tears to my eyes.. ;u;

I've been feeling the same way, and this writing explains all that I'm feeling.

Ever considered becoming a singer? Just curious.
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Re: ~ ρ α ι η ~ A very personal piece..

Postby wicked; » Sat Feb 02, 2013 1:21 pm

Oh my gosh, thank you so much! Those really are the nicest comments I've been given on anything. I really appreciate you even taking the time to read this. I'm so happy you could relate. The day I wrote this, happened to be quite a bad day for me. ;; I really found it helped express my emotions. <3

Yes, I have actually. :) I'm currently in vocal lessons as well. I'd love to be a singer, but not someone who was turned into some freaky Hollywood experiment. I'd like to be a soulful singer. <3

Again, thank you so much for the nice words!

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Postby daemon-infernalis; » Sun Feb 03, 2013 3:39 am

Well I better get ready to stalk your songs X3. And I know the feels, when I'm in a bad mood I write poems. c:
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